User:Gooseberri/Damophon/ADhist312 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gooseberri


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gooseberri/Damophon


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Damophon

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

Your intro to your topic is very well done, the first paragraph does a good job explaining who Damophon was and where he was admired

You state "However recent work at Messene where others of Damophon's sculptures have been found, indicate a date around 190 BC for his floruit." where is this information from?

It seem that you are paraphrasing a lot of the original wiki page in your lead, maybe change that into more of your own words or find a way to add some other information

Good job changing the wording, it is easier to understand now

Content:

I really like the inscriptions section, the quote you bring in is a great quote from the Decree of the Kythnians

You do a great job of explaining this inscription

Is there any other inscription you bring in and discuss to further this section?

Is there any other information you can add to make another section?

Maybe split off some of the lead and make it it's own section that you further your content?

Be careful, as some of work is similar to the original wiki page as you change a couple words but are not bringing in a new idea

Organization/Media:

I really like the picture you use, however, it is also on the original wiki page, is there another picture of Damophon's work that you can use?

Your lead seems very long compared to the rest of the page, maybe try and break that up

Citations:

You do a good job bringing in more sources that the original

For the most part, you back up a claim with a citation which is great, but make sure to do that for every claim as you do not want to plagiarize

Tone:

Very well done bringing in information without bias

Very concise way of bringing in information