User:Gooseberri/Damophon/Obevo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gooseberri


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gooseberri/Damophon
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Damophon

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead Section:

Considering the scale of the article (unless I am possibly reading it wrong), the lead section is the dominant portion of the article. Because of this, it does reflect the rest of the article, though while not entirely necessary it might be beneficial if it's structured in a way that does create a small lead section with succinct summaries of each paragraph or point, while going into specifics at later points in the article. Again, this might be more user error on my end!

Clarity of Article Structure:

Similar to the lead, the length of the article and information available dose not give much room in terms of creating a rigid, labeled structure. However, the flow of the article seems to make sense in the order they are presented.

Coverage Balance:

Again, based on the article size nothing seems to take more dominance over another section. Nothing within the article seems to be off topic or come out of left field.

Content Neutrality:

They do a great job on remaining neutral throughout the entire article, even when discussion more contentious aspects of their article topics (i.e unclear dating to Damophon's work). The article does not lean into too negative or positive topic coverage, and they do not make claims on behalf of unnamed people without citation to said works. Article is very neutral!

Sources:

For the size of the article, their page so far is well cited and does a good job of brining in more primary sources than the original article had. It covers the claims made within the article well, both from a variety of peer reviewed sources as well as the statements reflecting those sources effectively. The only relatively weaker citation would likely be the use of Britannica or the need for a linked citation for their block quote, but that is much more in the realm of nitpicking than an actual fault. Great job with the citations!

Overall Impressions:

I am unsure how much information regarding this topic is widely available, especially considering how it is arguably very specific, but I think a great idea would to try and add more information wherever you can. If possible, because the topic is related to a sculptor, it might be a helpful to include a gallery or series of photos of the sculptors accredited to Damophon besides the The Head of Titan Anytos. Besides this, I think the article is well rounded and going in the right direction. Nice job!