User:Goughenourt/Body Building/KarimMassarani Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Goughenourt


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Goughenourt/Body_Building?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bodybuilding

Evaluate the drafted changes
You took the information that was already present on a Wikipedia article and summarized it. I don't think that this was the purpose of this assignment. You should have added to the Wikipedia article that already exists about bodybuilding

Lead: All of this information was found in the Wikipedia article about Bodybuilding and you didn't really add anything new. The lead is maybe a bit too concise as two sentences is probably not enough for a lead to an article

Content: The content, just like the lead, was all already present on the Wikipedia article about Bodybuilding, so you did not add anything new. The point of this assignment is two edit or add to an existing article, not to summarize an existing article. Nevertheless, the content is relevant to the topic and there is no missing content. The article doesn't deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps

Tone and Balance: The content is neutral and the article does not appear to be biased toward a particular position. There are no viewpoints that are over represented or under represented.

Sources and References: The only source that you used was an already existing Wikipedia article about the same topic. Again, I don't think that you understood what the purpose of this assignment is. I would recommend you to contact Professor Hazard for help. Your sources should not include your Wikipedia article.

Organization: The content is clear and easy to read although there are several grammatical errors. The content is well-organized and separated into different paragraphs and different sections

Overall Impressions: You didn't add or change anything from the original article. Your article is not more complete. The purpose of this assignment was to change and add to an existing article or to create a new article, not to summarize an existing Wikipedia article. Your sources should not include Wikipedia. Instead, they should include reliable websites, articles, and books written about bodybuilding. If you don't know where to start, I recommend you to read through your article and find citations for claims that are missing citations. Then, see where you can add to your article and remember to always cite your sources. If you need further help, please don't hesitate to contact me or to email Professor Hazard. You did not do this assignment correctly.