User:Gpanetti/Bilingual education/AMHMtz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Gpannetti)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gpanetti/Bilingual education

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your topic is of importance and interest to those of us who are linguists and to those who are interested in education in the United States, a country with many immigrants. Your stats are solid and give good weight and purpose to your article. I am anxious to see what you will add about "education", now that the need for it is established with your two existing sections. I am wondering what other sections you might include, which might be covered in your "Lead" section once it's written (or is this an existing article you are adding to?) The most important change, perhaps, would be to balance your text as written, given the Benefits section has several quotes and the ELL section seems to be paraphrased. Maybe you could paraphrase some quotes in Benefits and add them in ELLs. Also, noticed your references are on the Bibliography page. I might move them to Sandbox Draft and point out the portions of text paraphrased or quoted by using those numbered references at the end of those portions of text. Great start, so far. A topic near to my heart as well.

Thank you. I'm still trying to navigate Wikipedia so your suggestions are very helpful!