User:Grace.jana07/Environmental racism in the United States/Cameronkalantar Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Grace.jana07


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Grace.jana07/Environmental_racism_in_the_United_States?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

This article is very intriguing and the additional information that you included does add to the article and make it read more complete. I found that starting with the history of environmental injustice concerning the Native Americans in the united states, established the tone and started with a very key topic. With that in mind, I found that as I continued to read there was a lot of key information that was not included in regards to the environmental segregation within this country. While it is briefly mentioned in context with certain statistics and incidences, I believe there is still a lot of information on legislation, specific points in history, and long-term implications that would benefit the article in question. When considering environmental injustice it may be worth noting the sudo forms of segregation that occur and how factories place their systems closer to areas of lower-income rate which leads to higher rates of disease in certain areas. With that said, I find that this article with your additions serve as a very holistic cover of the topic, but with the inclusion of these specific details and potentially historical accounts of these events the article would be a lot more complete and effective.