User:Grace.k.e./Pat Freiermuth/Donuts11112 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Grace Eritano, grace.k.e.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Grace.k.e./Pat Freiermuth


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pat Freiermuth

Evaluate the drafted changes
The purpose of this article was to inform readers about Pat Freiermuth's football career and his backstory. The article was okay at first but it was missing some information in some spots. You added in a good bit of information about Freiermuths life and the many different awards he won along with the records he has broken. The sources you added were up-to-date and reliable. I like that you focused the personal life around the athletic part but I feel like it would be nice to hear a little more about his life outside of football. In the college career section of the article, the information is a lot to fit all in one paragraph so maybe just try breaking it up into two so the reader isn't so overwhelmed by information. Overall your draft looks well thought out with reliable sources. It is written in a non-biased way and in the third person. I think adding just a little more information to the article will make it great.