User:GraceGAC/Rialto Bridge/Sabrinacucumber Peer Review

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GraceGAC
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:GraceGAC/Rialto Bridge
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Rialto Bridge

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Perhaps break this into two separate paragraphs
 * First talking about the original "Predating the construction of the Rialto Bridge, the only possible method of crossing the Grand Canal was boat travel. The first dry crossing of the Grand Canal was a pontoon bridge built in 1181 by Nicolò Barattieri. It was called the Ponte della Moneta, presumably because of the mint that stood near its eastern entrance. Barattieri’s initial bridge structure existed until the thirteenth century, when the development and importance of the Rialto market on the eastern bank of the canal increased traffic on the floating bridge to a critical magnitude."
 * Then talk about the newer bridge "In 1255, the original pontoon bridge was replaced by a bigger, more sophisticated wooden bridge. This structure had two ramps meeting at a movable central section, that could be raised to allow the passage of tall ships. By this time, the bridge had become more largely associated with the Rialto market than the mint that had originally given it its name, and thus it was renamed The Rialto Bridge. Building upon this association, during the first half of the 15th century, two rows of shops were built along the sides of the bridge, all of which contributed their rent expenses directly to bridge maintenance."
 * For this paragraph I would suggest talking about the attempt to overthrow the Doge and then talk about the maintenance
 * In 1310, the bridge was set on fire during a failed conspiracy by Bajamonte Tiepolo to overthrow the Doge. The original target of the revolt was the Palazzo Ducale, but when this attempt failed, the involved parties set fire to the Rialto Bridge as they retreated from the scene.
 * [Even before the fire maintenance was vital for the timber bridge. Decades of wear and tear took their toll on the wooden Rialto] The bridge was repaired soon afterwards, but [ultimately] collapsed completely in 1444 when a large crowd formed on the bridge to witness the bridal procession during the wedding of the Marquis of Ferrara. It became apparent to Venetian architects at the beginning of the 16th century that a stone bridge might lend itself better to the great popularity of the area. Unfortunately, initial efforts to build a stone bridge were unsuccessful, and the bridge collapsed again in 1524.
 * Under the history tab the subheadings are inconsistent
 * my suggestion is to add a subheading for the first set of paragraphs or create a new section
 * Perhaps add a section talking more about the cultural significance and how it played a role in Venetian life?