User:GraceRinaldi/Parental abuse by children/Assumption25 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Grace Rinaldi

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:GraceRinaldi/Parental_abuse_by_children?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Parental abuse by children
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Parental abuse by children

Evaluate the drafted changes
First edit:

I agree with your first edit that the first paragraph contradicts the second paragraph greatly. You also found a good source to use to back up the correct claims made. I would suggest rewording the paragraph in better and more accurate terms than what the original author wrote.

'''I am happy you like my source. My next step is to rewrite the paragraph with the source I found.'''

Second edit:

I agree that changing the title makes more logical sense to the content of the article, as it focuses on more than just grandparents. I would suggest re-writing this paragraph to fix grammatical errors, and also looking into the sources to find the researchers that need to be listed.

'''I'm glad you see the benefit in changing the article name too. Do you like the potential article name I suggested? Fixing grammar throughout the article is my number one goal.'''

Third edit:

I like this change for the paragraph, and how you swapped out the word normal. I would work on re-writing the list underneath that paragraph in order to make the section more formal, and flow better.

Thank you for the suggestion of re-writing the list underneath- to make the section more formal.