User:Gracekelly27/Freedom Writers/Daniellablitz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Grace Kelly and Jared Halverson


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gracekelly27/Freedom Writers
 * https://docs.google.com/document/d/1iCOkqtq8704chDfO7_7-wzK5Kfkj3u3qLi-sn0TtS38/edit


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content: I think the content added is relevant to the topic. I've never seen the movie so I went back to read the original first and then yours. Yours does a really job of explaining the themes thoroughly that are present throughout the film.

Tone: There's nothing in this article that really bias. It's more of explaining themes and adding to an already existing movie than giving personal opinions.

Sources: Those look really good. I only looked one of them up and it came from a book. Looks good to me :)

Organization: The content is well-written but I would just make sure like a true wikipedia page. It should be easy and clear to read, not like an essay. Also my one suggestion is when you add your work to the original, I think it would be good to add the first paragraph of the Effect on Education to where it already talks about the Freedom Writer Diary's. It's the first big paragraph. I think your paragraph would be good there because then it would continually flow with the work that's already there.


 * Would your themes go before or after the cast list?

Overall: Overall, I think you guys did a really good job! Your addition to the article is something that's really interesting and necessary. Your strength is going in-depth about the themes of the movie.