User:Gracekline/Navajo dolls/Erinmerr Peer Review

General info
Gracekline
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Gracekline/Navajo dolls
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Navajo dolls:

Evaluate the drafted changes
The contributions within "Cultural History" develop content that is mentioned in the article Lead. However, the title of this section is perhaps not specific enough, given the limited nature of the information. Further, the content does not seem neutral due to words such as "ingeniously" and "innovatively", as well as the claim that the garments "are cherished both within and outside the Navajo community." While I do not personally disagree with any of these ideas, I find they could potentially appear persuasive. That being said, this is a great article to develop because it represents a historically underrepresented population. The citation that was added for the "Cultural History" section is excellent, though it appears incorrectly in the references of the published article. Overall, these additions have improved the depth and clarity of the article.