User:Gracelyn099/Secondary (Chemistry)/Sheryl Munshan Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gracelyn099, Kmainse, Joannaubc


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gracelyn099/Secondary_%28Chemistry%29?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Secondary (chemistry)
 * Secondary (chemistry)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead has been updated to include more details and summarizes the topics pretty well. You guys did a great job in separating the table and explaining it in sections, it seems like it gives a lot more information about the how the term secondary is applied. The content is relevant to the topic and much better than what the current article has. It is clear and informative, but i believe it could be a little more concise, for example you could add links to specific words which will make it straight to the point. Another piece of information which talks about the reactivity of different functional groups and linking it back to "secondary" really strengthened your article. The content is neutral and there is no bias in the tone of the author. The content added is up to date and doesn't persuade the reader to incline in one direction or the other. The added content is backed up with relevant sources and makes sense overall. The sources used are current. There are a few grammatical errors that were observed. In the paragraph for secondary alcohols, i found two errors and i think adding links to specific words like "allylic" and "benzylic" would do it better. This might sound really picky but in the "secondary alcohols during reactions" I spotted two errors in the third line, you might want to look at those. I believe the article can be made more concise. In the first paragraph, I believe you can get rid of the explanation of what an "R" group is since its already covered in the beginning. You could also attach a link to it, maybe. The content is well organized and easy to follow, however I would like to make one suggestion to make the paragraph have a little more similarity, you could add sub sections like reactivity of amines, amides and phosphines since you have that for alcohols. The images added are perfect and rightly segregated to give details about each section. They relate perfectly to the content but have not been captioned. The images are visually appealing too. Overall i would say you guys did a nice job breaking the figure apart and explaining each section nicely.