User:Graceyi11/Housing at the University of Washington/JEMGC Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Graceyi11


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Graceyi11/Housing_at_the_University_of_Washington?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Housing at the University of Washington
 * Housing at the University of Washington

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * Great job having a descriptive lead, this is something I need to work on in my own article
 * The first sentence and the last sentence of the lead could be considered contradictory. Since fraternities and sororities are not included in HFS, you could either delete the information about fraternities/sororities or edit the first sentence so it says housing at the University of Washington is not only restricted to HFS (I see this isn't part of what you changed, but I thought I'd add it anyway in case you'd want to make the change)
 * I like the addition of the fact about how 71% of freshman decide to live at residence halls. Although I feel like why they decide to live there definitely varies. Maybe just keep it at just the percentage data

Content:


 * Good job keeping the content up-to-date by adding the rest of the current residence halls, as well as the decision to keep Haggett open
 * Since Haggett Hall is still open, some of the tenses could be changed. For example, changing "was" to "is", etc.
 * Is "Undergraduates are housed primarily in residence halls" (in the lead) true? A source would be helpful here
 * I really like how you included the current costs of some of the residence halls. Including this information to the rest would definitely be very helpful to some people who read the article.

Tone and Balance:


 * The tone is neutral for the most part. It could be a bit more neutral in a few instances; instead of describing the benefits of living at each residence hall, you could just list the amenities that exist there
 * In a way, it feels like the article is promoting living at the residence halls. For example, "This hall has a great balance of study and student life resources and facilities". Editing some of the the adjectives out (like the word "great") could be a solution
 * A few of the residence hall sub-sections could use more attention. I can see that you're in the middle of working on that

Sources and References:


 * A few of the sources are from UW HFS itself, reliability is questionable as there may be bias
 * Great job making sure your facts are connected to citations

Organization:


 * The article is well organized. Nice job creating different sub-sections for each of the residence halls
 * Very few to no grammatical errors in your work, I just added a period and edited a name (that were not included in your changes and were there before)

Images and Media:


 * Adding some more updated images could make your article stronger visually. You could take some pictures of the West Campus buildings

Overall Impressions:


 * I really enjoyed reading your article. I feel like I learned a lot about the UW residence halls that I did not know, for example that Elm Hall was built around an elm tree. You added informational content that improved the quality of the article