User:Gracezillaa/Fast fashion/Elliesamide Peer Review

The Lead of the edits that have been made by Grace are relevant to the information she has discussed and adds to the previous article. The first sentence could have included something related to fast fashion and overall be a little more related to the topic. The Lead did list the apps that were related to the topic and dove deeper into them in the article. The editor could have included bits of information from every app listed though since it was brought up in the beginning. There is a sentence in the beginning that I feel the article could do without which was, " A mass consumption of food, beauty products, home decor, and clothing in particular. On social media we see hundreds of videos of hauls and shopping sprees." This sentence seemed not relevant to the fast fashion context but rather towards the over production of other products.

The content is however up to date and all the links work and are recent to the times. There are a few sentences in the beginning that I assume are supposed to give context information but I feel like could do without. This addition is definitely something that is relevant to add though and I think a great addition for readers to view. The standpoint throughout the written article remained neutral and just fact based. There are no images but I don't think they are 100% necessary but they could possibly add interest to the added article.

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