User:GraciLouAckerman/Cheryl D. Miller/Kayshackelford Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:GraciLouAckerman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:GraciLouAckerman/Cheryl D. Miller
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cheryl D. Miller

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead is concise and does a good job of highlighting the major aspects of Miller's career.

A further exploration of the Early Life section would help balance out the content amounts in the article. Also, this is the point in the article when I noticed that it might be helpful to start citing sources within your draft. As it starts to address how Miller felt growing up, it would be nice to know what kind source this info is coming from (direct interview of the person? a biography? article?).

There are some minor typos that need to be fixed. For example, in the Education section, "she live close to her mother" should be "lived," and in the Design section, I assume "Miller reflects on your long career as a designer" should be "her long career..." In the Writing section, "Miller's influence on the way contemporary graphic designers critically engage with the discipline" is a sentence fragment.

There is a really great amount of content that spans over several areas of her career. The article also has a good usage of links to other Wikipedia pages.

Overall, the language feels neutral and is easy to read. However, there are a few phrases that feel vague and could either be expanded upon or cut. For example, in the sentence "Before graduating, Miller was asked to make a contribution to the field of graphic design, instead of the usual visual design project," the phrase "instead of the usual visual design project" is not necessarily adding any details that could not be ascertained from previous statement.

It would be interesting to see the part about her on YouTube in the Design section expanded, and maybe have that listed in external links. Does she actively upload to a channel or did she participate in some sort of set series or talk?