User:GrandeCuy15/Louise Beavers/Latimhc0 Peer Review

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(GrandeCuy15)


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 * User:GrandeCuy15
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 * Louise Beavers

Evaluate the drafted changes
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The content added is neutral and detailed, and clarifies important details about Louise Beavers. The lead section is much more detailed, as opposed to what it was originally, which was just two short lines. She also added a citation where it was previously flagged for lacking one.

Though the lead section is much more detailed, some things could be edited for greater clarity and conciseness. For example, I would suggest taking out "extremely" in the first sentence and combining the first two sentences. It could look something like this:

Louise Beavers (March 8, 1902 – October 26, 1962)[1] was a successful American film and television actress in dozens of films and two hit television shows from 1927 to 1960.

Additionally, I think some of the details added to the lead section could instead be summarized to just show the most important points about Louise Beavers. The specific details then could be added to the later sections of the article.

Overall, I believe she added relevant and helpful to the understanding of Louise Beavers and her life.