User:Grantloseke/Santa Maria Gloriosa dei Frari/Nicho-sal Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Grantloseke


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Grantloseke/Santa_Maria_Gloriosa_dei_Frari?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Santa Maria Gloriosa dei Frari


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Santa Maria Gloriosa dei Frari

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

Lead is informative and introduces lots of new information. The wording is long, however, with minor grammatical/spelling errors. There are a few style issues: informal wording and unnecessary clarifiers and phrases, such as "very", "usually just", etc. With minor edits, the lead would be very strong, since the information presented is solid.

Content:

Overall the content is informative, relevant, and interesting. No issues with the content itself, but it could be presented in a more clear, concise, and formal style

Tone and Balance:

The content is presented neutrally; no claims are made, and all viewpoints are equally presented.

Sources and References:

All information is tied to the sources, accurately representing them. The links are functional.

Organization:

The content is separated into proper sections according to topic. However, grammatical and stylistic issues are present; similar to the Lead section, there are many uses of informal wording or phrases, along with a few typos. Some sections, such as the Bell Tower Intervention, are difficult to interpret. While the information can be understood, it takes several rereads to fully comprehend the sentences. As mentioned, this is not because the content itself is irrelevant or confusing. Very simple fixes will drastically improve the readability.

Images and Media:

One main image was included, which was the floorplan of the church. This was extremely beneficial to the article, and the labeled rooms were very informative and helpful in deciphering the plan. No issues with this part.

Overall Impressions:

The article is very interesting and contains a lot of information. However, simple revisions of style and grammar would clarify the content and increase its relevance.