User:Grapesszz/Potassium bitartrate/AccountAlias Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Grapesszz, Ddoroc


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Grapesszz/Potassium_bitartrate?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Potassium bitartrate

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall, awesome job on the proposed changes in your sandbox. I think that the Potassium bitartrate article will benefit a good deal from your additions about potassium bitartrate/cream of tartar in the wine industry and in cooking.

Lead

 * The Lead has not yet been updated to reflect the new content added. This is reasonable since the additions are still in the sandbox.
 * The Lead does include a clear and concise introductory sentence/paragraph.
 * The Lead does not a description of the article’s major sections.
 * The Lead does not include information that is not present in the article.
 * The Lead is a bit too concise and could use some more detail.

Content

 * (The content that will be added from the sandbox is relevant to the topic and is up-to-date.)
 * There is not anything in particular that seems to be missing from the potassium bitartrate Wikipedia page. (However, the sandbox does include information that is reasonable to add: Information about the wine industry and the use of potassium bitartrate in baking.)
 * The article does not deal with one of Wikipedia’s equity gaps.

Tone and Balance

 * (The content that will be added from the sandbox is neutral.)
 * There are no biased claims in the article.
 * There are not overrepresented viewpoints—there are not really viewpoints to begin with.
 * (The content is the sandbox does not attempt to be persuasive; it is informative.)

Sources and References

 * (All new content is the sandbox is backed up with reliable sources.)
 * The sources are relatively current (in both the Wikipedia page and the sandbox).
 * (There are a couple of issues with the references section.
 * It should have the subheading “References” instead of “References2”.
 * References 1, 2, 8, 12, and 13 need formatting corrections.
 * References 12 and 13 are the same reference.)

Organization

 * (The new content is easy to understand and is written without grammatical errors.)
 * (The new content is properly broken into sections. However, I’m not sure if a new subtopic for “Wine industry” is necessary under the topic “Occurrence.” Perhaps the new wine industry content could be integrated into the rest of the section.

Images and Media

 * The article currently includes several helpful, well-captioned image.
 * The images are laid out in a sensible (although not particularly appealing) way.

Overall Impressions

 * (The sandbox content that will be added will certainly improve the quality of the article overall. It will flesh out the preexisting content of the article and add more breadth.)
 * (The content added gives more context to statements that already exist in the Wikipedia article. For example, the sentence “Over time, crystal formation is less likely to occur due to the decreasing supersaturation of potassium bitartrate, with the greatest amount of precipitation occurring in the initial few days of cooling,” fits well into the context of the paragraph and adds useful knowledge.)