User:Grapesszz/Potassium bitartrate/Joannaubc Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Grapesszz, Ddoroc


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Grapesszz/Potassium_bitartrate?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Potassium bitartrate

Evaluate the drafted changes
- I like the picture you used and I think it would be helpful to add a couple more pictures, just to break up the article a bit.

- Some times you switch between using "cream of tartar" and "potassium bitartrate" in consecutive sentences and I think it might be less confusing if you stick with one name for a paragraph, or add a sentence saying the two terms can be used interchangeably.

- I really like the "science behind baking" section! It might be nice to add a quick introductory sentence before diving right into the information though! You could even just add the following paragraph to the start of that section instead as I think it will help with the flow:

"Cream of tartar is used as a type of acid salt that is crucial in baking powder. Upon dissolving in batter or dough, the tartaric acid that is released reacts with baking soda to form carbon dioxide that is used for leavening. Since cream of tartar is a fast-acting, it releases over 70 percent of carbon dioxide gas during mixing."

- Good use of internal links

- There are quite a few run on sentences in the "wine industry" section that make it kind of hard to follow. Try separating some of these sentences into two and remember john brogan when you're revising!

- One of the sources used is linked to a website that looks like a business page, it might be good just to see if you can use a peer-reviewed source instead! link #3.

- link #6 just brings you to a wikipedia search page for ISBN's but then it doesn't let me find what the actual source was, it might be something wrong with my computer though but maybe double check it?

- Links #7, #9, #10, and #11 link to the same article. - should all have the same number. When citing, instead of adding a new source "automatically", hit "re-use" instead and it give you the option to re-cite the same source.

- Links #12 and #13 link to the same article.

- Overall great article so far! I like that you chose specific parts of the article to improve with lots of care!