User:Gray0696/Aerobic anoxygenic phototrophic bacteria/Squamelia Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gray0696


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gray0696/Aerobic_anoxygenic_phototrophic_bacteria?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Aerobic anoxygenic phototrophic bacteria

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the lead is probably from an earlier draft of the project because there is no introduction to the article as a whole, it is just a listing of one of the sections that is discussed. The section that is labeled "Isolation, Enrichment, and Maintenance" is overall well written and does a good job of incorporating the complex terms in this article without sounding overly repetitive, although the term "aerobic anoxygenic phototrophic bacteria" is used here while it is abbreviated ""AAPB" in other areas. I also noticed one small issue where the word "medias" is used instead of "media."

In the section labeled "Limiting Growth Factors," there were a couple instances where the subject was labeled as "AAP" and not "AAPB. I also think that the first sentence should be split up so as to not have the overly circular language with mentioning predation and grazing in the same thread. Other than that I think this section looks good.

Finally looking at the cellular structure area, I think that some images might be good here as the forms that are described here as being from various shapes are unfamiliar to me and make the significance of this part less impactful.