User:Greeenjungleee/Adele Goldstine/StudentWGST320 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Greeenjungleee


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Greeenjungleee/Adele_Goldstine?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template // https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Adele_Goldstine&type=revision&diff=1049989336&oldid=1046755551 (Reviewed a comparison of Greeenjungleee  revision with previous article version since I could not find the edited summary in the personal sandbox)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Adele Goldstine

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content added is in regard to Adele Goldstine's early life and education. The content added is up-to-date. The content added does not seem biased to a particular point of view, but I felt that the line "She was friendly and had good energy" wasn't necessary or relevant to the article. The content added doesn't focus on Goldstine as much as it focuses on people from her life such as her father and husband. From the two sources added, one did not accurately reflect what the cited sources said. "Her mother said that Adele had many skills as such as a teacher, programmer, mother" however the article that was cited didn't reference Goldstine's mother saying that, but was just a statement made by the article's author to describe Goldstine's legacy. I believe the sources are current, but there are better peer-reviewed sources on Adele Goldstine. Articles referencing her legacy and early life can be found based on a Google Scholar search of her name. The content added is placed under the appropriate heading, so it is organized.

My overall impression is that the content that was added is organized and did add more background information to Adele Goldstine's early life. However, I suggest adding additional peer-reviewed sources and elaborating further on Goldstine herself whether it is her early life, education, or later work to improve the quality of the article.