User:Greekazoid/Eudaimonia/ExSilvissima Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Greekazoid


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Greekazoid/Eudaimonia?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Eudaimonia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the changes you made to the section starting with "In his Nicomachean Ethics (1095a15–22) Aristotle says..." make it significantly easier to follow! My one question/concern is about the use of "we" (WP:PRONOUN), maybe it could be rephrased as something like "When someone is said to be a very happy person, that usually means that they seem to be subjectively content with the way..."

Good move adding a citation to the Epicurus section

Might be worth linking the Republic wiki article again when it appears in the Plato section

The Gorgias (dialogue) and Callicles could also definitely be linked (same with a couple other characters/places (Glaucon, Lydia), just to make it easier to get more background info)

Could add some clickable links to the works listed in the Socrates section (Plato Apology 30b, Euthydemus 280d-282d , Meno 87d-89a )

Reading thru The Stoics section in the original article, it might be worth breaking the first paragraph up in the middle, making the discussion of the Christian idea of virtue its own paragraph (not a vital change tho)

Overall, I think you did a good job of adding citations where they were missing and making the article more accessible!