User:Greenmuffinsonly/Plagioclimax community/Selaneme Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Greenmuffinsonly


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Greenmuffinsonly/Plagioclimax community
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Plagioclimax community

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

* copy & pasted from word doc* Again, let me know if anything is unclear!

·      Intro section/Lead referenced one source

·      Potentially add more to round out the full scope of plagioclimax communities

·      Really small edit for 2nd sentence: use “this” as an adjective, so “This process…” to be more descriptive

·      Also, watch active/passive voice!

·      Just a general question: Are plagioclimax communities exclusively and always vegetative?

·      2nd sentence is repetitive in stating direct vs indirect

·      Consider cutting down some sentences to make them more succinct, for instance, in the 3rd paragraph under ‘Examples,’ what exactly are the implications for other organisms in the food web due to   the reduced sardine population

·      After bulleted list, in section underneath, 1st sentence is run on

·      Technical edits: double check use of commas for a compound sentence

·      remove dashes in sentences

Lasting Effects section sets the stage, go into more detail on the irreversible issues and long-term implications

Links for reference 1 and 3 did not work

·      #1 came up with an error when selecting the doi link


 * 1) 3 loaded a log-in page

Possibly "link out" words: succession, niches, and anthropogenic