User:Greenstudents123/Effect of Climate Change on Wine/SaveTheTrees365 Peer Review

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In the first and second paragraph from the introduction section and the grape ripening process section, they seem a bit redundant. Consider elaborating more in the introduction section about the overall process of producing wine, maybe reference its history, etc.

When discussing temperature as one of the key factors affecting grape ripening, I think you need a source referenced.

Good example/case study from Napa Valley. Maybe consider elaborating on this piece of evidence and how napa is a key wine producing region globally.

Reference other factors besides temperature that you mentioned in the first paragraph — humidity, soil conditions, etc.

I think you need to make the differences between grape ripening and grape quality more clear. Both seem like interesting points to address in relation to climate change but they seem to discuss the same things in your article.

I like the format you used listing the changes in wine production. The evidence is clearly laid out here in a way that is unbiased but also provides key examples showing that climate change has had profound effects already on the wine production industry.

In the wine region section, you could possibly consider adding a graphic or map to indicate the wine regions you are discussing, which ones are most prominent producers, which are most affected today by changing climate, etc.

I really like how you all broke up the sections to cover the vast majority of sectors in the wine industry that have been affected thus far by climate change. The effects are clear and are prevalent in all areas of society whether economic, consumer-based, cultural, etc. This is a super interesting topic and was presented thus far in a way that is easily understood, with clear presented facts, and in a way that doesn’t sway the readers point of view. I think adding more concrete evidence and citing them in your paper will continue to add to the articles content. Great job!