User:Greer365/James V. Neel/Nasyed9 Peer Review

General info
21muabf, Greer365, McKinlieGray, Smallah
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Greer365/James V. Neel
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Greer365/James_V._Neel/Bibliography?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_bibliography

Evaluate the drafted changes
I liked how concise and detailed this bibliography is! I liked the detail on how his reputation was at risk, and I found it fascinating. I think it gets a little bit confusing and wordy around that area but I think it is great!

Some changes that I would consider is adding his last name instead of referring to him as "he". I think it would make the article stand out a little bit more.

I think the most important thing you can do is to reduce some of the sentences. Some of them are a little bit wordy, and it gets a little bit confusing to read.

I noticed how many sources are on this page, and it made me realize that I need to add more sources to my article. Your sources fell into it perfectly and it blends well. Great job!