User:Grindlet/Cordilleran ice sheet/Corduroycopepods Peer Review

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Lead

I see that the introductory sentence of your first paragraph is from the original Wiki page, but it's confusing to me. I think it can be tightened and made more clear. Maybe: "[      ] believed the Cordilleran ice sheet melted very quickly, probably in four thousand years or less (CITE). This is in unlike the Laurentide Ice Sheet, which is believed to have taken as much as eleven thousand years to fully melt except for areas that remain glaciated today (CITE)."

You might want to briefly mention the following paragraphs as mini-sections to orient the reader.

Your lead emphasizes the landforms created by the thawing of this ice sheet - I want to know more in the later paragraphs.

Content

Why did it melt so fast compared to the LIS?

Could link or briefly explain "marine-terminating" and "land-terminating." I get confused about underwater/above water glaciers/marine glaciers/marine-terminating glaciers.

I would like to know more about why glaciologists believe that marine-terminating glacial fronts melt faster than land-terminating fronts. Does the difference in speed affect landform creation?

Cool nod to anthropologists! :)

I think you could emphasize the alacrity of thawing a little more in the later paragraphs so your section drives home that this rapid thawing was very important for landforms, people, and flora/fauna. Why does it matter that it was fast?

Tone and Balance

Omit "extremely" in the second sentence. It feels non-neutral.

Split last sentence in last paragraph into at least two. This could also lean to a biased writing - do all glaciologists and anthropologists agree on this new path of human migration? Or is it still up for debate? Could be interesting to have a "debate" mini-section....

Sources and references

Looks like you have many reliable sources that are not too often reused.

Could cite the "kelp highway" https://blog.education.nationalgeographic.org/2017/11/08/did-the-first-americans-take-a-ride-on-the-kelp-highway/ obvi not this blog but a good start.

Images and Media

Could add:

- photo of some lab techniques associated with understanding thawing

- diagram of marine- vs land-terminating glacial thawing to explain why one is faster than the other

- photo of a landform created by the ice sheet's retreat

Overall Impressions

Nice work, Thomas! I learned a lot and am interested in learning more. You do a good job of covering a lot of interesting effects of the thawing but I think I want to know more about why it thawed so quickly and concrete examples of what it left behind/opened up (landforms, flora/fauna, coastline)... You do this for the human migration part, so maybe you could incorporate the small Refugia section into your work and slightly expand on this to bring home some ideas about why the rapid thawing was important to plants/animals. Just a thought.