User:Grizz99/Antisemitism in Argentina/Graybeboy Peer Review

General info
Grizz99
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Grizz99/Antisemitism_in_Argentina?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Antisemitism in Argentina

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Yes, the lead has been updated. Yes, the opening sentence describes the subject well. It could elaborate a little more on the sections. It does contain some cited info not contained in the article, but that could just be from its incompleted state. It is concise.

Content

The added content appears relevant and up to date.

Tone and Balance

The content intends to be neutral, however, I feel like it could be phrased more, gently, for lack of a better word. For example, in the 'German Antisemitism vs. Argentinian Antisemitism' section, there's this sentence: "Jews were racially inferior, bent on dominating and controlling society, and after the world, and thus targeted for elimination". Adding something as simple as 'Nazis believed that' would make this sentence both less blunt, and less factual seeming on the racial inferiority bit. We don't want to say the Nazis were right, obviously, even by implication.

Sources and References

The sources seem reliable.

Organization

The content is well-organized and lacks obvious grammar and spelling errors. Though, returning to my concerns from the tone and balance section, it's almost too concise at times.

Overall Impressions

The article quality has been improved. Most of the original article focuses on the modern day, with the oldest specifically referenced thing happening in 1992, and adding a more substantive history is important. That thoroughness is the strength. In the interest of not beating a dead horse, I will simply say that the weakness is the bluntness of the tone. ]