User:Gschoner/Ban Non Wat/Bilsonian Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gschoner, Meyboo, Pengwyn00


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gschoner/Ban_Non_Wat?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ban Non Wat

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead has been updated and is now more concise. Most of the information in the old article was moved from the lead into subsections, a good decision on the editors' part. There is now a summary of the different subsections as well.

Content

Everything in the article is relevant to the topic and up to date, within 10 years of the present.

Tone + Balance

The tone is neutral, very good. The only issue I have with it is that in the bronze age section, y'all refer to the discovery of wealthy burials as "remarkable". It isn't really specific about what is remarkable, so I would either add more info about that or remove the word altogether.

Sources and References

The sources are all good and seem to have relevant information. The authors are all reputable too. It is always better to have a diversity of authors, but that's something that y'all will change when you are finishing editing the article.

Organization

The organization by time period is a good idea, it is clear and easy to follow.

Images and Media

The added image is pretty cool, I think it helps tie the article together. It keeps attention for sure. It has a clear caption as well.