User:Gschoner/Ban Non Wat/Kbee2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gschoner


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gschoner/Ban_Non_Wat?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

lead

- I liked how you included links to other pages/ I dont know if its important to have a link that describes everything such as the one for excavation

- You talk about the Bayesian analysis but dont really explain what that is

-I think you did a good job at explaining the dates of the site, but I dont know if its important to go into detail how they found the dates in the lead

- maybe talk more about what the rest of the page is going to talk about

Content

- May want to add some additional information such as specifically the artifacts found/ how it connects to other sites

- did a good job at summarizing the time periods

- missing some information about the Bronze Age (only talked about one of the phases)

- content is well related to the topic and the lead

Tone and balance

- I think it was written in a very objective neutral tone

Sources and Resources

-a lot of resources!

- some of the sections are cited really well (the bronze age) the Iron Age section does not contain any citations

- think you did. good job of containing both White and Highams articles (maybe you could say something about the debate they are having and how it related to the cite)

Organization

- Maybe work on the sentence flow so that it sounds more congruent (adding transitions or words like in addition or also)

- I think the sub sections are divided perfectly

great job!