User:Guadalupequinones/La Mujer Moderna/Stellaeve1515 Peer Review

Hi Guadalupe! Awesome job. This sounds like a really fascinating magazine. Overall, I think the content and information you provide is really good. Not to mention, Your writing is clear and concise, yet articulated with sophistication. I think the most helpful piece of advice I can give is formatting. I found that in each section Hemila was mentioned each time and often accounted for the majority of the sections. For example, under "Women's Suffrage" and "Redefining Conditions for Women," maybe only talk about how this relates to Mexican society in general rather than Hermila's contributions. Instead, if you put Hermila's contributions under her own section, it is easier to follow or else I almost thought for a slit second your project was on Hermila! Your sources/links all worked on my end. You seem to have done your due diligence and have put a lot of effort into this project and it shows! Great job and email if you want to talk further after class one day. Best, Stella.

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