User:Guancong lance li/Chinese Dama/Yidanlong Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Group 11 (Guancong Lance Li, Ace Dai)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Guancong%20lance%20li/Chinese_Dama?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * and a word document that Ace Dai sent to us.
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi! Great work done! Here are some suggestions:

Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - In the first paragraph I see that you added a very informative introduction of the character Dama in the film 橙子红了. But there is no lead in your work. It would be better if you update the lead to reflect your new content of character Dama in the film.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? - No, there is no Lead.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? - No, there is no Lead.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? - No, there is no Lead.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? - No, there is no Lead.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? - Yes the content you added is relevant to the topic. The film, novel, and characters are all related to the topic Dama.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? - Partially yes, there are two sources are in recent years.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? - The TV series part can be more informative. You may add some related information about this TV series.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? - No, it doesn't.

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral? - Yes, there are no extreme arguments.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? - No, the contents are in a neutral position.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? - In the social activity part, there are several positive views on Dama. I believe there might also be some negative influences that Dama brings in society, for example, noises for Square Dance(广场舞). It would be more neutral if you mention both cons and pros.
 * Does the content add to attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? - As stated above, there are many positive descriptions of Dama which may be persuaded readers to have a great impression of readers who just understand the term Dama.

Sources and References


 * Is all-new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? - It is hard to say since there is no in-text citation. It would be better if you make the citation stands out so the reader can easily track the citation for more information.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.) - It is hard to say since there is no in-text citation. I checked the sources which are very related to the content.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? - Yes
 * Are the sources current? - Most of the sources are current, there are sources from 2002, 2020, and 2022. And there is a book cited that was published in 1991 which is the original novel. Even though the 1991 one seems not a current source, it is an original novel so it does not influence the reliability of the content.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? - Yes the writers are different. There is a very small change that includes historically marginalized individuals the sources are either from the author, or peer-reviewed movie websites.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) -
 * Check a few links. Do they work? - Yes the links work.

Organization


 * Is the content added well-written - Yes, the content is easy to follow.
 * Does the content add have any grammatical or spelling errors? - There are some grammatical errors.
 * Is the content added well-organized - Yes, the contents are well organized and separated into several sections.

Images and Media


 * There is no image or media added to this article. If adding images or media could help your writing maybe it is a good idea to add some.

Overall Impressions


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - Yes there are several examples of Dama which help the reader explore the term Dama.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? - The related novel is very informative. There is a concise plot.
 * How can the content added be improved? - You can edit the lead section that reflects your work. Also, the portion of each section is not balanced. For example, you can add more information on the Related TV Series part.