User:Guo9810/Analgesic adjuvant/Japown Peer Review

General info
Guo9810
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Guo9810/Analgesic adjuvant
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Analgesic adjuvant

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Concise and clear introductory paragraph that does not add any new information to the article
 * Gives good summary

Content


 * I know that you started from a stub article and were hoping to take it 1-2 steps higher in the grading scale. I think you have done a good job with the content itself in that it is complete and comprehensive. You have touched on all the major classes of analgesic adjuvant while remaining on-topic.
 * Question: Is it true that all antidepressants act by modulating serotonin? I thought there were some dopamine/norepinephrine ones
 * Note: The section on alpha-2 adrenergics is incomplete
 * Note: I would try and define the words analgesia and adjuvants as separate words somewhere at the beginning of the article because you use the word analgesia independently at times and some readers might not know what that means.
 * Note: Throughout the article, you have some incomplete sentences that say something like: "some controversy about xyz." I would recommend complete sentences, such as "there is controvery about xyz" or "experts disagree about xyz."

Tone and Balance


 * I think that your overall tone is very descriptive about what is happening instead of persuasive, so well done. The article describes the approach and its goal clearly.

Sources and References


 * Your sources and references are great.

Organization


 * I love the organization into major classes of medication. Some of the organization under each of the subheadings is a little hard to follow.
 * For example, under "anticonvulsants" you list the mechanism of anticonvulsants, but the next bullet point is about neuropathic pain, then the topic returns to types of anticonvulsants in the next bullet.
 * My recommendation would be to talk about neuropathic pain elsewhere or to make it a sub-bullet to the previous sentence while mentioning it in the previous sentence
 * I actually think that each of your subsections has enough information in the opening couple sentences that you do not need to bullet them. For example, the first two bullets under "antidepressants" could be a sort of short paragraph, then only use bullets for when you are listing things. I think that this would make the article flow more naturally.
 * The rationale subheading is important, and I like that it is at the top

Images and Media


 * n/a
 * One feedback would be that you can include a diagram of pain transmission at the neuronal level to show how some of these medications are thought to work. I do not think this is essential, just something to think about.

Overall Feedback


 * Overall I think you have done a great job, especially considering what you started with. I think that you have managed to elevate this article beyond its previous status. The content is comprehensive while not overly descriptive or jargon-laden.
 * Main improvement that needs to be made is the organization and the bullet-listing.