User:Gupton99/Dog communication/Kratinaha Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gupton99


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dog communication

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your drafted additions are interesting and well written and make the existing article more complete. However, there are no citations included in it yet. In addition to the information you already provided I would find it interesting to know how olfaction works in dogs making them such better smellers than humans. In your first paragraph you wrote "sniffing where another dog has urinated gives the dog a great deal of information" which sounds slightly colloquial to me. Using e.g. "plenty" might be more fitting.

Response to Feedback
Yes- I have all my citations in my bibliography and was trying to figure out how to directly transfer them so I don't have to do them all again. Overall, thank you for the input, I will adjust to incorporate what you said into my article.

Second round of feedback
Hey Grayson

You covered quite a lot in your contribution and I find it easy to read and to understand. Maybe you could go into more detail about some specific pheromones. Besides this I mainly have suggestions for wording:


 * You could reword this sentence to make it more precise as the scents themselves aren’t called pheromones but the molecules that have these scents are. “The special scents that dogs use for communication are called pheromones“.


 * Stimulus and odor are a bit redundant in this sentence as odors are also stimuli. I think you could just leave out “a stimulus” “In order for a dog to detect a stimulus, or odor”


 * I would specify “their” in this sentence: “The most common type of scent marking is urine-marking to identify their territory”


 * As far as I know you need a comma instead of a semicolon here: “Females; however, tend to utilize…”


 * To me, this construction sounds too colloquial for Wikipedia. It might be that I am just not familiar with it, with me not being a first language speaker. If that is the case, just ignore me: “Overmarking is when…”


 * You don’t need the apostrophe here: „Dog's gain social information...“