User:Gurekosn/Concussions in American football

Lead
The lead sentence is very long and gives too much information. There is a lack of description for most of the sections throughout the page. The information on the study done on mice seems irrelevant and is not mentioned later in the page. There is not much in the Lead that describes what the rest of the page is going to be talking about. The lead is not very concise but is overly detailed. There is not much flow to the Lead and it jumps all over. Adding more about what is in the article body is needed and less about what is not.

Article body
Most of the content in the article body is tailored to the topic. The amount of information provided helps explain the topic well. There are portions of the page that are irrelevant to the topic and are not needed. Since the topic of the page is about American football I would take out the parts about the Canadian Football league. The only graphic in the page is a graphic that only mentions American Football once and the rest is not related to football. More graphics or images would be nice.