User:Gurekosn/Concussions in American football/Jonesks4 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gerekosn


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gurekosn/Concussions_in_American_football?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Concussions in American football

Evaluate the drafted changes
I thought the information discussed in the article draft about the lead section was a good evaluation. I do agree that the study done on mice information does seem to be irrelevant in this article. You explain that adding more information about what is in the article body is needed, but you don't specifically give examples that you would contribute to the article. Try to be as clear as possible as to what you are planning to add to the article. I thought you did a great job evaluating the article body overall. You explain there are portions of the page that are irrelevant to the topic and are not needed and it would've been great if you included what you would add in the place of the information that is not needed. What types of graphics or pictures would you add to the article? You explain that the references are valid and work fine, you could've improved this evaluation by adding some references that you believe should be added to the article. I believe your evaluation of the article overall and your explanations of what should be added or deleted was the strengths of the article draft. Some things that I feel could be improved is to explain more about what you would add yourself and maybe try and add contributions to a section of the article. I also think that your article draft could've been improved in the reference section by adding some references you found that would help improve the quality of the article.