User:Gwa19/Fata Morgana Land/Dstovall Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gwa19, LeeLaiben


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gwa19/Fata Morgana Land
 * Article page with changes: Fata Morgana Land


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
1. What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?

The article explains the topic really well, especially fixing the lead section. It explained what the Fata Morgana Land more clearly and gave a little more info than what was there before. It's an interesting topic because it's non existent and it's like a rumor. I also see a mirages section is being added, I feel like that will be a good section to explain about to an extent. Also what you added/changed was clear and easy to understand.

2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?

Fix the source that was used so people can research/use that source. Also in your history changes, there's a source after a comma, would just put it at the end of the sentence next to the other source. Maybe switch the History paragraphs order to go from explaining more in detail about island and then going into the sightings.

3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?

Looking for more sources and also fixing the source that was used, overall what you added I think helped the article, it's just the source is showing errors.

Response
Regan - We are intending to add more about the mirages section, I agree with you that I think it will really help to flesh out the article and provide a better understanding to people who would potentially be reading the article. I have a couple sources that I am using to learn more information about mirages and will be adding those.

Lee- The broken source is not ours, it comes from the original article, but we have a plan to fix it. We're going to find a source online with the same information (it's a map) and link that instead.