User:Gymshark4321/Discrimination based on skin color/Tjuadiv2023 Peer Review

General info
Gymshark4321
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

"Discrimination based on skin color"


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Gymshark4321/Discrimination based on skin color
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Discrimination based on skin color

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * The lead has been updated to reflect the new content added, providing an overview of the issues related to education, discrimination, and health disparities.
 * The introductory sentence is concise and clearly describes the broad topic of racial disparities, and the lead includes a brief description of the major sections of the article.
 * The lead effectively introduces the topic with relevant information not present in the article.The lead is clear and concise, not overly detailed.

Content:


 * The content added is highly relevant to the topic of racial disparities, addressing issues in education, healthcare, and societal biases.
 * The information seems up-to-date, as most sources are cited with publication dates. Review the sources to ensure credibility.
 * The article does address topics related to historically underrepresented populations and equity gaps in society.

Tone and Balance:


 * The content appears neutral and does not appear to promote any particular bias or viewpoint.

Sources and References:


 * Most of the new content is backed up by reliable secondary sources of information, and the sources are generally cited appropriately.
 * The sources used appear to be thorough and relevant to the topic.
 * While most sources seem to be current, but a few do not have publication dates.

Organization:


 * There don't appear to be significant grammatical or spelling errors.
 * The content is well-organized into sections that reflect the major points of the topic.

Overall Impressions:


 * The content added has significantly improved the overall quality of the article, making it more comprehensive and informative. Good job! :)
 * To further improve the content, ensure that all sources have publication dates, and consider adding images or media if relevant to the topic.

Overall, the contribution is a valuable addition to the article and aligns well with Wikipedia's guidelines on peer review. No major revisions needed in my opinion!