User:Gzora1/Truman Doctrine/Camillemcleod Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gzora1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gzora1/Truman_Doctrine?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Truman Doctrine

Evaluate the drafted changes
For the lead, I would suggest adding a little more detail or more of a general overview. You don't want to include too many details, but adding something akin to "the bill followed x historical event" or "it was enacted as part of the Truman Doctrine" could help to connect the lead to the rest of the article.

The historical background of the Truman Doctrine and the political states of Greece and Turkey were valuable additions. I wonder if this section could be strengthened by mentioning Cold War containment strategies? It might be too much detail, but it could be useful to add a link where you wrote "contain Communism" to redirect to a Cold War article.

Adding sections on legislative history and controversy/reception could provide a more comprehensive or detailed overview of the bill. It would track the bill from introduction, through Congress, and to its passage, and you could discuss who was for or against the bill, the general public mood, etc.

I would consider reorganizing your "Provisions" section to make it into a list instead of just a paragraph. I think it could help with organization and understanding of the details of each provision if they were listed by name and then described with subheadings.

As far as sources, adding a few more would be beneficial, particularly if you find some on legislative history, background, and reception/controversy it could make the article more reliable and help to expand on those topics.

Overall, I think the added content all strengthens the article, but it could be further strengthened with a few more sources and a couple additional sections.