User:Gzycc/Tommy Shelby/3milysk15 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Gzycc/Tommy Shelby


 * Link to draft you're reviewing User:Gzycc/Tommy Shelby
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Tommy Shelby
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Tommy Shelby

Evaluate the drafted changes
After analyzing the article and the students response to fixing or adding information to the article, I have compiled comments to give to the student. To start with, the new information provided is relevant to the topic and corresponds to what is being said, and relating to series one, the information that is being added by the student is more detailed and gives the audience a better understanding of what is being said, and it is was good he corrected spelling errors as well. Also in series one, the student adds information to the sentence regarding the characters telling each other that another character had found the guns, which allows the audience to know what is going on. Next, in series three, the student continues to add information that will allow everything to make more sense, and based off of his bibliography he sources appear to show important and reliable facts regarding this article. The content added by this student is neutral and does not lean towards one side, the information provided is just adding more detail to the article to make it overall better. The content that is being added is very understandable and well written, and can easily be interpreted. After reading the adjustments for this article I felt that the student did not put too less or too much new information for the article. The content that the student is adding is well organized and split up into categories, which makes it easy to depict what their intentions are for the article. Overall, I believe that this student did a great job on editing this article, and I found great details that will make the article better, and he provided factual information with reliable sources. He kept the information neutral, and expanding the detailing on the sentences that needed it.