User:HAA113/Culture of the United Arab Emirates/Echoes of Existence Peer Review

General info
HAA113
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:HAA113/Culture of the United Arab Emirates
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Culture of the United Arab Emirates

Evaluate the drafted changes
* Lead:

- The author does not have a lead that explains a brief description of the article. However, he starts by introducing a subsection about "Falconry" in the "Sports" section, and how it is recognized by UNESCO as a cultural human heritage, especially within the UAE.

- In addition, the author did include topic sentences for each separate subsection that he is adding to the actual article.

* Content:

- The content that the author is planning to add to the article is up-to-date and relevant to the United Arab Emirates Culture. Additionally, the article contains small gaps about the misrepresentation and underrepresentation of Culture in the UAE (like cricket being a "cultural" sport in the UAE).

* Tone:

Generally, the author's added information about Culture in the UAE is Neutral and biased and does not overrepresent nor underrepresent any certain views.

* Sources:

The sources that the author used are verified and credible and most of them are journal articles that are peer-reviewed. In addition, the author did an excellent job of paraphrasing information from their secondary sources while keeping the main ideas behind them.

* Organization;

The sentences are well-structured in an easy-to-read manner. Additionally, the added information is broken down into smaller subsections that address different aspects of Culture in the United Arab Emirates, like falconry, poetry, drama, and fiction. However, he could add a transitioning sentence between each section to either link each section to the other or to improve the readability much further.

* Images:

No images are added to the new information.

* Overall Impression:

The added information improved Wikipedia's article content since it provides an overall insight of the culture in the UAE. Strengths:

The added content provides a concise and clear representation of the culture in the UAE, which aids the readers in understanding. Furthermore, the added information covers a wide range of the Emirates culture, from sports to literature which provides the readers with a broad perspective of its culture.

Improvements:

Providing examples would further help the readers understand the information provided.

Providing more citations would make the information more credible and allow the readers to explore and read more information

Improving the neutrality of the added content, he discussed the literature section while being a bit biased.