User:HHAMMAD2/African cuisine/Kristienaire Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

HHAMMAD2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:HHAMMAD2/African cuisine - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * African cuisine - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
in your most recent article i liked how you started of with what is mainly used when it comes to African cuisine. it helps the reader have some back knowledge of what the other is to expected when reading your article. i would say to go in and add a little more detail like you could talk about colors, taste and so on within different African countries. what i like about your content is that it not just talks about one african area but multiple, i think people focuses more on the west when they think of African but i liked how you incorporated multiple as well as the face that before anything you added in history which also gives a reader something to look back on and be able to connect everything when they read further into your article. the tone of your article was not only neutral but it was very educational which i enjoyed because it was telling the reader things they eat as some people may find it a problem you made sure to make it wound respectable of all African countries. looking over your sources i like the mix of secondary and educational you put in there because you are not only getting information from scholars but ads well as other people's view points which adds on to information making your work stronger. your paper i would say had very good color in terms of imagery it showed a variety of different food eaten, not only that the way a reader is able to read your article and picture some that aren't in images is really good because it keep your paper interesting. the organization from start to finish was very good because everything supported the previous, it all made sense in terms of started from one place and going to the next. overall i truly enjoyed reading this because it not only gave me the feeling of being back home but again because it was an interesting paper the more you kept reading.