User:HIS346/Baranof Island/ToriTrouble Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

HIS346


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:HIS346/Baranof_Island?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Baranof Island
 * Baranof Island

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Needs to be further developed, hard to review as is, but the overall tone seems the right one to start. Perhaps adding some phonetic guide to the name of the island could help and would match what is typical for such articles on wikipedia.

Content and Tone

Content added is relevant to the topic, but could use some more development. I assume the "to be added" means the content will be further developed in a second draft. The rest of the sections of the article should be rewritten to match the same style of writing of the new sections. The structuring seems logical, although perhaps it could be enhanced with the use of lists for the wildlife and vegetation sections. If there is a wildlife section, perhaps changing it to "flora and fauna" would be better, and complement a more detailed description of the island. One thing to consider would be to separate the text blocks a bit, this would only be if it still visually looks like a block once images are added. Another thing to develop would be the overall use of the sandbox as the visual example of how the article would look (I.e. removing the "existing" sections and copying them in as how the final article would be, existing sections and all). Overall the added content does add to the general level of information of the article, but should be continued to be developed both in content and its visual presentation.

Sources and References

Sources and References seem of an adequate amount and come from reputable sources. References are well cited throughout the new text and are in the proper notation. Some things could be hyperlinked to other wikipedia articles, however, to provide a quick access to further information for the readers.