User:HIST121-Augie-student/Downwinders/Schnickelfritz66 Peer Review

General info
(provide username) Cherubj
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:HIST121-Augie-student/Downwinders
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Downwinders

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * 1) Is the lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * 2) The lead has been edited in a couple spots to be more concise. The sentence structure before was good, but the edits improved it. Could use another phrase besides "but also"
 * 3) Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * 4) Yes, all relevant. The new information adds more background to the topic and includes updates of some areas of the Downwinders and the RECA act, which are relevant and more up-to-date.
 * 5) The added information about RECA and compensation and expanding amendments in the act help to understand the bigger picture of what the act eventually came to do and how it was intended to help those who had been effected by radiation exposure.
 * 6) Is the content added up-to-date?
 * 7) Mostly yes except for "....particularly in New Mexico and several Western states, including Guam." This structure insinuates that Guam is also a U.S. state, but it's an un-included U.S. territory. This could be changed to "... several Western states along with the territory Guam."
 * 8) Is the content added neutral?
 * 9) Yes, the content is neutral and is of facts without any bias towards any side. All of the information added shows information from secondary sources of essays and academic journals.
 * 10) What are the strengths of the content added?
 * 11) The content added makes the article that much closer to being complete with new information for readers to get a deeper and more detailed read into what the Downwinders were and to have more information all in one credible source.