User:HMcConne/Tanisha Williams/Godawgs598 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) HMcConne


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:HMcConne/Tanisha_Williams?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * same as above

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

overall


 * good info box, i really like that it has institutions and thesis and doctoral advisor!!
 * you're probably working on it but adding some pics of her obviously and also of other things like the universities or the species she studies or the martu people or even a pic of one of her blackbotanist tweets! (or all of these)
 * lead- notes below
 * content- looks good
 * tone and balance- neutral and unbiased
 * sources and organization- notes below, good order
 * images- notes above
 * new article- nice lots of links

lead


 * super good
 * change at to a: "She is currently at Burpee Post-Doctoral..."
 * you can also link the blackbotanist website to the hashtag in the first section using the link thing and choosing external site, i think this may make it easier anf encourage more readers to visit the website instead of having to look at the references bc honestly people ignore those so

early life and edu


 * also very good, simple and to the point
 * if you cant find anything on early life, maybe just change the heading to education

career


 * i think it could be good to repeat where she is currently working and maybe elaborate on it if you can here rather than just in the lead
 * "She performed this research in the both the Schlichting lab and the Holsinger lab in the Department of Ecology and Evolutionary Biology at the University of Connecticut, where she was the recipient of a Bridge to the Doctorate Fellowship as well as a UConn’s Outstanding Multicultural Scholars Program (OMSP) fellowship" this sentence sounds good so no need to change it but here is an alternative way of breaking it up so it is not so long: "She performed this research in the both the Schlichting lab and the Holsinger lab in the Department of Ecology and Evolutionary Biology at the University of Connecticut,. There, she was the recipient of a Bridge to the Doctorate Fellowship as well as a UConn’s Outstanding Multicultural Scholars Program (OMSP) fellowship". and side note, should this go in awards? or both places?

awards


 * I know you're still working on this but i like the people that have been using tables for this!

selected publications


 * not sure if you want to but for the first one, you can choose in the settings to only show a certain number of authors before et al instead of showing all of them. this does not look bad because it is not an overly long citation but just so you know!

references


 * i think this title should be a heading, not a subheading
 * i also think if you can, finding more sources would be good! I know it's hard and there may not be a lot out there!
 * citations should be outside the periods