User:HYang2024/Inclusive design/Hcikim Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

HYang2024


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:HYang2024/Inclusive design
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Inclusive design

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
Currently, there is no lead section in this article. Originally there is the lead section. However, HYang2024 removed the lead and made a new "Introduction" section. I encourage HYang2024 to move the content in the "Introduction" section to the lead. The content in the Introduction summarizes the overall content.

Content
[Planning] I expect HYang2024 will remove the Planning section after reflecting all planned actions in this section.

[History] I was expecting this section would include more thorough history of the Inclusive design. However, the current content simply covers the origin of Inclusive design. I encourage HYang2024 to consider to change the section name to "Origin". The current version is way too short and lack to be a content of "history".

[Differentiation from ... ] I applaud HYang2024 for providing clear description of the distinctions between confusing concepts. It is good to know the distinction of course. However, I also wonder if there is no common part other than differences. What makes people confused between those concepts? What are those commonalities? This content is currently missing while there were a bit of such content in the previous original article.

Tone and balance
Overall tones are good and well balanced. I do not see any biased or partial toned sentences in the article.

Source and references
References are properly cited. HYang2024 added significant amount of references which can make this article stronger.

Organization
They are concise and good. However, I already mentioned above a few comments regarding section content that can be added or moved.

Image and media
Currently, there is no image nor media at all. It would be great if there would be some images or media such as diagrams that may support the readers' understanding. HYang2024 can consider including images but it is just my two cents.

Overall impressions
Overall, HYang2024 made significant edits. I applaud HYang2024. There are just a few minor issues that can be reflected easily and shortly. There is no major concerns. I just want to add another minor comment that there is a typo in the History section. HYang2024 can consider either to remove "such as _," or to add a few appropriate examples behind the "such as" in the History section. Currently, the sentence is incomplete.