User:Haaklikebird/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Raven Chacon

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
Because it is of a person who falls under the categories I am interested in, i.e. an underrepresented composer.

Lead Section
Pretty clear and succinct. It gives us his name, background/heritage, identifiers, and biggest accomplishment to date.

Content
Generally useful. The "Postcommodity" section seems redundant in that it could be included within "Life and Career." You could justify having the separate section if there was more information and it was clearly a large part of his career, but right now it feels unnecessary.

Tone and Balance
In all quite practical and fact-forward. There's no immediate expression of bias in the tone, no superlatives or praising happening.

Sources and References
Many diverse sources. I appreciate that even though there is not a ton of writing in this article, there are still plenty of sources available to continue writing more, or redirect researchers. Most of the sources are relatively recent, which seems like a good thing, and from reliable sources like museum websites and news and culture magazines.

Organization and writing quality
The writing is fine. Obviously it doesn't need to be heightened, but there are some parts where I would want to clean up the punctuation and grammar, and reorganize a bit. I'm not a huge fan of the "listing accomplishments all in a row" kind of sentence, but there's probably not a better way to do it since that's what all the sources give.

Images and Media
Only one image, of an exhibition he gave. Otherwise nothing else. I do wish there was an image of him, perhaps someone could find one through creative commons. I do like the inclusion of the exhibit, because it helps to give the readers a reference of what kind of artist he is.

Talk page discussion
No talk page discussion. Probably because he's lesser known and the article is a stub (although not classified as such?).

Overall impressions
In general, I think this article has a good foundation. With more specific data and information, it could be fleshed out more. It is hard to do, however, with a living person because of privacy, access to information, and constant production of new material and work by the subject.