User:Habdulbaki/Dying/Tranhar.ucsf Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CS-UCSF, Pardeep8, Habdulbaki

Evaluate the drafted changes
SIGNS OF DYING:


 * Consider having a heading/simple phrase for each bullet in signs of dying like
 * “Confusion: restlessness; visions of people and places that are not present; pulling at bed linens or clothing (caused in part by changes in the patient's metabolism).”
 * “Breathing disturbance: Rattling or gurgling sounds while breathing, which may be loud (death rattle); breathing that is irregular and shallow; decreased number of breaths per minute; breathing that alternates between rapid and slow (caused by congestion from decreased fluid consumption, a buildup of waste products in the body, and/or a decrease in circulation to the organs).”

CULTURE:


 * “In some cultures, death is the complete termination of life. In other cultures, death can include altered states of being, like sleep or illness.”
 * I think this would benefit by highlighting some cultures that does not require going into the reference.
 * “in some cultures of the South Pacific”
 * Consider linking the area you are talking about (corresponding Wikipedia article)
 * Spelling “definitions” in third paragraph
 * Good transition to medicalization :)

MEDICALIZATION:


 * Consider linking Resuscitation, CPR, Hospice, Palliative Care (corresponding Wikipedia articles)
 * Consider making Resuscitation into paragraphs? Does not read like a list.
 * “Instances when CPR…” sentence can be separated into two sentences for clarity
 * Consider discussion of patient goal discussions, maybe like a guideline on that discussion (all measures, no measures, comfort care)