User:Habdulbaki/Dying/Z1a2i3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

CS-UCSF, Pardeep8, Habdulbaki


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Dying


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dying

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

-I think condensing the signs of dying intro smaller bullet points would be helpful to make it easier to read. Alternatively breaking up into sections by system is particularly useful in improving readability

- maybe linking to other pages on cultures in the culture section could be useful, and again organizing into subsections like caring for the dying vs afterlife beliefs

- possible consider adding a sentence or two about what the medicalization to introduce the section