User:HabitsofEelz/Nature writing/As2460 Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
I like the fixing of the lead, and how you made it more direct and clear

I like the new first paragraph of pioneers, but it needs a source

the 19th century part where they list all the names is a bit confusing, maybe shape it up for clarity

Love the explanation on Carson with more depth

You definitely need more citations, but you noted that you already know that

I would add more about the writing in and of itself, theres a lot about the pioneers, but I think there should be more explanations on the work

Its a hard topic where people who made it and shaped it are important and have their own ways, but I really think you could incorproate more of the style in the lead

maybe add paragraphs about the nonfiction vs fiction and the prose vs poetry

I think your edits are really good, you just need more sources, and maybe some beefing up on the facts about the various styles!