User:Habtcnj/Homework/AGorski28 Peer Review

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Hi! Here is my peer review:

Lead:

The current lead has not been updated to include new content. The original article appears to have strong information in the lead, as it defines homework and addresses the current debate surrounding whether or not homework has positive effects on students' learning. However, the original article does not include any sources in the lead section, so if this is a section you are considering editing as you develop your draft, I would suggest adding sources to support some of the existing information.

Content:

The content within the article draft addresses the issue of determining why and when homework is necessary to support student learning, and includes a reliable source that is effectively linked at the bottom of the article. It also is up to date and relates to the overall topic. However, it is unclear which section of the original article the information in the current Sandbox draft is from, or what issue specifically "has become the most misunderstood concept within our classrooms." Including the title of the section where the information in the current draft is from would help in determining how it fits in to enhance the original article. Since the current draft is a small Wikipedia edit, it does not include any other sections from the original article which have been revised. When reading through the original article, I noticed one section in particular that could be improved would be the section on "Busy Work." I would suggest revising this by trying to eliminate some of the bias that appears in the beginning of this section. Depending on the sources you have collected, I would try to see how they can fit into some of the sections to support information that needs a source, or how they could be used to enhance or revise some of the other existing sections.

Tone and Balance:

The tone of the added information is neutral and does not present any bias. As you continue to develop your draft, I would recommend maintaining this neutral tone, and avoiding any language that could serve to persuade the audience in favor or against the assignment of homework. It also would be helpful to try to improve any sections of the original article that contain bias (such as the "Busy Work" section), if you are deciding on editing the article.

Sources and References:

The current Sandbox draft includes one source, which is properly linked and listed at the bottom of the draft. The book where the information is from is cited correctly according to Wikipedia's standards, as it includes a 10-13 digit international ISBN number without any spaces or dashes. When continuing to develop your draft, I would try to include more of the sources you have found where they might fit to enhance the current article, or see if they can be used to add a new section to the existing article.

Organization:

The information provided does not contain any grammatical errors and for the most part is well-written. I would suggest using more specific language to express which issue "has become the most misunderstood concept within our classrooms." In the second sentence of that edit in your draft, I also would state what "it" is (by saying "homework") in the second sentence to be more specific.

Images and Media:

The current draft does not have any images or media, although some are used in the original article. If you find that using some visuals and media will enhance the rest of the information that you will include, it may be helpful to include some in your final draft.

Overall Impressions:

Overall, the added content helps in delivering information that is supported with a source that is properly linked. A strength of the current edit in the Sandbox draft is the way in which it provides information that is related to the topic, and is followed by a citation from a reliable source. More drafting is needed to be done in order to further develop the current edit into the final revised article. Some suggestions I have to help with this would be to include the titles of the sections that the information being edited is from, as well as to identify specific places within the original article that could be edited. The information in the original article could be improved by either eliminating biases, adding additional sources to support some of the existing information, or presenting new information that would also be supported by credible sources.