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Article Selection
Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

 * Article title:Cholera vaccine
 * Article Evaluation
 * There are points which were made that I feel require citations (those in the first paragraph as well as those that were indicated).
 * The first paragraph kinda seems choppy and would be re-written to flow better and removing some aspects in this paragraph.
 * A statement about WHO approved dukorol for public use in certain places, but what are these places?
 * https://www.who.int/emergencies/disease-outbreak-news/item/2023-DON437
 * https://www.cdc.gov/cholera/vaccines.html
 * Mentionned about other ways to prevent a cholera infection, but they did not really mention what to do => could add a section on prevention?
 * https://www.cdc.gov/cholera/preventionsteps.html
 * Side effects and effectiveness of the vaccines were mentionned. Potential able to expand on who should not get the vaccine, if there is any contraindications.
 * https://iris.who.int/bitstream/handle/10665/258763/WER9234.pdf?sequence=1
 * Could expand on coverage and costs of the medications in other countries auch as Canada and other under-developped countries (global project was mentionned which was good)
 * https://iris.who.int/bitstream/handle/10665/258763/WER9234.pdf?sequence=1
 * "Although the vaccine specific protection observed, 60–70 percent, has been described as "moderate", herd immunity can multiply the effectiveness of vaccination" citation needed
 * https://www-ncbi-nlm-nih-gov.uml.idm.oclc.org/pmc/articles/PMC8167659/     (different values find another resource on vaccine effectiveness - going to find a systematic review)
 * https://pubmed-ncbi-nlm-nih-gov.uml.idm.oclc.org/28729167/
 * https://iris.who.int/bitstream/handle/10665/258763/WER9234.pdf?sequence=1
 * "The oral vaccines are generally of two forms: inactivated and attenuated.[citation needed]" citation needed
 * https://www.who.int/teams/health-product-policy-and-standards/standards-and-specifications/vaccines-quality/cholera#:~:text=Two%20distinct%20types%20of%20oral,subunit%20of%20the%20cholera%20toxin.

Option 2

 * Article title:Pneumococcal vaccine
 * Article Evaluation
 * There are points which were made that require citations
 * Certain points should be moved around, such as "These vaccines are generally safe.[1] With the conjugate vaccine about 10% of babies develop redness at the site of injection, fever, or change in sleep.[1] Severe allergies are very rare.[1]" which should be moved to a new sections labelled side effects of adverse reactions.
 * More information regarding canadian guidelines should be included
 * "Due to the geographic distribution of pneumococcal serotypes, additional research is needed to find the most efficacious vaccine for developing-world populations." - this sounds that it could be a bit biased sounding
 * "In developing countries, the order was 6, 14, 8, 5, 1, 19, 9, 23, 18, 15 and 7" - not really sure what this mean, it should be looked into and should be stated with clear intentions.
 * "Additional pneumococcal vaccine research is taking place to find a vaccine that offers broad protection against pneumococcal disease.[40]" - We should remember that these vaccines only reduce the chance of getting the infection and does not prevent the infection => There is no gaurentees of 100% protection
 * Sources:

Option 3

 * Article title:Insulin (medication)
 * Article Evaluation
 * Citations are needed where indicated
 * Openning statement shoudl be more general such as what Insulin does for the body and why insulin is important to have. - The article is already linked to the insulin WIKI page.
 * Explain the difference between natural insulin that was previously used as insulin compared to the newer types of insulin. (I.e. natural insulin is a bit slower acting, etc.). You can also explain the development of the different types of insulin (for instance, changing certain aminoacids in the protein, the insulin protein will change it expression and will act a bit differently such as becoming more long acting or becoming very quick acting, etc.)
 * Being more specific for a subcutaneous injection, instead of writing " is typically injected under the skin"
 * In the side effect/medical uses sections, explanding on what insulin does to the electrolytes in the body such as effects on potassium, magnesium, and phosphate. In this section as well, signs of toxicity of insulin if given to much and what to do in this case (What does hypoglycemia look like and how to treat it).
 * There is a statistic used about the amount of insulin prescriptions that are issued in the USA. This statistic should be reconsidered because it may show bias as there may just be higher rates of hyperglycemia in certain regions of the world due to diet and lifestyle compared to other ethnicities/regions of the world.
 * Is it appropriate to contain the history of insulin in the sections labelled "principles" - what should go into this section? Is the sections labelled right?
 * The article stated "creature" this may not be the right word because it may imply a "mythical creature" to some people. Consider changing creature to animal, mammal (depends on whether invertebrates are able to produce insulin: requires a citation).
 * Re-construct the summary sections for basal insulin (should not start off with medical conditions, but consider to mention what the insulin does first) and prandial insulin (Consider moving the sentance that mentions the use of prandial insulin in an insuulin pump which can provide an insulin that acts similarly to a basal insulin into this section). Consider altering the flow, so that it is more about the medication and how the medication works and why that medication is important in a clinical scenario.
 * Fix the sentance to the following "Cleansing of the injection site helps with limiting infections with the injections and technique would be important to ensure effective insulin therapy."
 * Consider altering this sentance as it lead to some confusion on my part "The increased insulin level causes glucose absorption and storage in cells, reduces glycogen to glucose conversion, reducing blood glucose levels, and so reducing insulin release. " change to " The growth hormone, insulin, will promote glucose absorption into the cell and the cell will build other molecules as a way to store this energy in the body (glycogen will be made from the glucose being absorbed). Because the body is removing the glucose from the blood plasma, there will be less glucose circulating through the body and will then reduce insulin release from the control center." - maybe this should be in the first section so people know how it works before reading other things.
 * Confirm this statement: What types of insulin can you mix together to have less injections at a given time?
 * Sections that could potentially be added?: Proper blood glucose levels or blood glucose target values
 * Could add some more information on combining antidiabetic drugs with insulin and how that looks.
 * Sources: